Some things you could improve on are you could make your paragraphs longer. Other than that, your blog was very enjoyable to read.
I agree with cassidy. the paragraphs could be a little bit longer
your paragraphs need to have two on each topic
I AGREE WITH THEM BUT ALSO TO HAVE THE TITLE OF YOUR BLOG NOT WHITE. iTS HARD TO READ.
You could improve on how long your paragraphs were and how much information you gave out because there was important details but not enough
Some things you could improve on are you could make your paragraphs longer. Other than that, your blog was very enjoyable to read.
ReplyDeleteI agree with cassidy. the paragraphs could be a little bit longer
ReplyDeleteyour paragraphs need to have two on each topic
ReplyDeleteI AGREE WITH THEM BUT ALSO TO HAVE THE TITLE OF YOUR BLOG NOT WHITE. iTS HARD TO READ.
ReplyDeleteYou could improve on how long your paragraphs were and how much information you gave out because there was important details but not enough
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